Your writing is beautiful and shows the story excellently: vividly and clearly. Its flow is also (seemingly) effortless despite the three moments separated by years. You don’t include any unnecessary explanations (for Remus’s reactions)…
Or any tricks beyond the verbal language, with the exception of the blank lines. (I mean: yay for no unnecessary italics, asterisks etc!) Yes, I think that this technical detail completed my enjoyment. I could completely lose myself in the illusion of sharing all this with your Remus, just as he lived the memory as real.
The concrete details are enchanting: the description of the wrapping, of the office, of the woods and, of course – as the climax – of Sirius loving him. Your ability to make the memory convincingly Remus’s own is amazing.
You add a partly humorous reference to the possibility that charmed visions are normal gifts in this magical world: the guarantee written on the plain card. At the same time I want to believe that the more universal message can be read in the way the fact that Sirius once loved him remains for ever.
Now you’ve distracted me from my fiction-writing and into this babbling. Do you mind if I friend you, so I’ll be inspired by gems like this in the future, too?
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Or any tricks beyond the verbal language, with the exception of the blank lines. (I mean: yay for no unnecessary italics, asterisks etc!) Yes, I think that this technical detail completed my enjoyment. I could completely lose myself in the illusion of sharing all this with your Remus, just as he lived the memory as real.
The concrete details are enchanting: the description of the wrapping, of the office, of the woods and, of course – as the climax – of Sirius loving him. Your ability to make the memory convincingly Remus’s own is amazing.
You add a partly humorous reference to the possibility that charmed visions are normal gifts in this magical world: the guarantee written on the plain card. At the same time I want to believe that the more universal message can be read in the way the fact that Sirius once loved him remains for ever.
Now you’ve distracted me from my fiction-writing and into this babbling. Do you mind if I friend you, so I’ll be inspired by gems like this in the future, too?